One late night two families of one kid have trouble with the members of their family. So they decide to meet up and discuss when they should leave. On october the 13th, They decide to go today, they pack their stuff up and went to the place they always went there together. After they meet up they both shared a memory about them being happy with their family. Hours has passed, after the talk about the two kids families, they began to walk to find their new home. Its 10:30 so late. They both go to a nearby tree and laid their stuff down to sleep. A couple of minutes have passed their is a lots of noise at this time of day.
“I think it's the tree,” Joseph whispers to Claire.
“Oh don’t be silly Joseph, ” Claire answered back .
The kids wondered about the tree, as it whispers to them, “Hello kids. I think your lost would you like to come with me to my place?”
The kids were terrified of the sound it whispers again. “Don't be shy it's ok” The kids have heard about stranger danger but it was night.
No lights, nobody everyone was a home asleep. The kids thought about the consequences if they go, but didn't know that it will happen this quick . The tree began to grow as the sun rises up too. It turn into this tree house? The kids woke up and saw that they were at the tree, they both said that it was just a dream but, the tree turned into a house? The kids go into the house to investigate it. the tree said something.
The kids were frozen and asked it “Were you the one talking to us?” they both ask shivering in fear.
Tree replies with a caring answer, “No need to be afraid, well I help towards good and caring people”
Meanwhile as the kids a have a second to realise that they were overreacting,
the Treehouse begins to talk . “Why are you kids here?” Kids have no reply from the question. Tree asks again “Why are you guys here?”
The kids shrug their shoulders. The tree thinks about what could've happened to make those kids come here?
Tree asks another question. “Did you guys run away from home or come here to camp?”
The kids lean against the tree not knowing to answer or not. The tree tries to give a good explanation to the kids but fails. The tree gives up. The kids felt uncomfortable with the tree after the talk .
The tree knowest the kids and tries to make it up to them. “ Hey you guys could go the playground, around the corner”
The kids jump in excitement and of course says yes. The kids run to the playground, but comes towards the police trying to look for them.
The tree knowest the kids and tries to make it up to them. “ Hey you guys could go the playground, around the corner”
The kids jump in excitement and of course says yes. The kids run to the playground, but comes towards the police trying to look for them.
“Oh no” they both say with worry in their eyes. Draft #2. To Be Continue…..
Beautiful story Hope, and excellent job getting it turned in on time. I really like how you added dialogue to make your writing more interesting. In the future, remember to revise your writing so that it is in the same tense throughout (For example: He walked or He walks)
ReplyDeleteHi Hope, my name is Michelle and I attend Glen Innes School. You have written an interesting narrative. Your ideas you chose to write your story is mysterious, you've put a lot of effort into this story.
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